Writing

and then i saw it
saw it all all the mess
and blood and everythink
and mam agenst the kitchin dor
the flor all stiky
and the wall all wet
and red an dad besid the kicken draw
i saw it saw it all
an wrot it down an ever word of it is tru

You much take care to write in sentences,
Check your spellings and your paragraphs.
Is this finished? It is rather short.
Perhaps next time you will have more to say.

This is the poem that Jacey and I have decided to teach to the class. It is very interesting. I feel it is in two parts telling two different stories. The first part is of a young child telling his story of death. He talks about the blood and the mess. He doesn't say how he feels about this but he does say that he saw it he saw it all. (I am assuming that he is a boy) I feel that they way this first part is wrote really helps establish that this child is young. All the spelling errors and gramatical errors help show that this child is eager to tell his story as he sees it. He writes the words as they sound. For example he spells beside with out the e at the end and that is how the word is said. He hasnt yet learned about silent e and other silent endings. The second part of this poem is very different. I think it is by the teacher. The teacher has looked at the poem and seen all the errors instead of the story that is being told. I get the impression that this teacher feels that her student could have done better, but if this teacher would have ignored all the mistakes then she would see the story and the voice and impact this has had on her student.

Goodbye to the Old Me

Heres to the brand new me
one that floats around
and skates on air.
The person I have become.

Goodbye to the old
I once knew.
The one I wont need
once I'm there.

Heres to the now
Heres to the fun
Heres to me

I'm who I wanna be
Who that is?
- I dont really care
cuz I've got friends that love me
blue skies shinnin above me.

Free to make the choices
I wanna make
left or right?
Go or stop?
Pink or blue?

It's all up to me
I'm in charge
no longer shy or afraid.

Goodbye old me
I wont be seeing you
Heres to the brand new me.

Questions We Have About Life

Why is life so hard?
Why is life so unpredictable?
Why is life always changing?
How long will it be?
Why is life so complicated?
How many choices will I have to make?
What would life be without love?
How would life change if people didn't have religions?
What is the right decision?
Why are others lives so different from my own?
What does my life have in store for me?
-Sadie, Jacey, Elena, Terra, & Devyn